Already on crutches how many more pieces would you break me into?
Already bruised by the nature’s call how much more pain would you put me through?
I have seen the rise I have seen the fall still we lived as one
I gave you a name I gave you my care
But you treat me as a cake, one for everyone to share
You are choking me now; it’s hard for me to breathe
I dreamed of us but ended up a victim of your greed
The “me” has strangled the “we”
And it’s hard to let go free
Lets switch places live me for a while
I am sick of living in denial
Don’t cut my wings I want to fly
Don’t rip my heart
I don’t want to die

Bairagi,"Madhesi is not a bad word. I don't understand why u jyapus are so ashamed of your identity and get mad when someone calls you JYAPPU." I guess he is a lil thick headed. Maybe there is a Witless Thakuri Shah barrier that is preventing him from comprehension or is he SCATING (prolly why his brain is full of feces) ? Like a Moron he goes on another obtuse rant. Ever heard of Gulariya(Paan Khailabaa ?) ? Kaa boley ess Gaddhey ko. Man I am done with you. You are nothing but a Ignorant Prick with no substance(your clarification of Thakuri not Madhesi proves that). Enjoy Your Mundane Existance. Sayonaraa...

@minnpl abs timi nai honest unbiased opinion deu na ta. If the poem was assignment for college level ( high school ta koi chains hola) literary class, what grade would you give ? Jyapu samudaya ko wah Wah sunda ta A+ + nai hola jasto cha.

@bairaghi

You're asking for grades? Based solely on the fact that you posted your caste as "Shah", and a minute later deemed it necessary to post "Thakuri shah, not madhesi shah", you get an F grade from me.

No. For the original poem.

No. For the original poem. Let's see If u have guts.

ओइ खाते मुजी, MlnNpl ले भन्याजस्तो आफु कस्तो शाह भनेर explain गर्नु पर्ने castist रन्डी मदर फकर तँ मुजी जस्तो कुक्कुरले गर्दा नेपालीहरु आफु आफुमा झगडा गर्छन | साले खाते आफु castist अनि अरुलाई भद्काउन खोज्छस? तँ रन्डीको छोरा होइन भनेर प्रुभ गर अनि म पनि सबै recant गर्छु

Yo ta Jhann khateey jyappu parecha. Feel sorry for u and ur jyapu mentality. Ani bhagwan le timilai Musha ko jasto saano Dimag diyeko ma.

बैरागी खाते मुजिलाई कुन ज्यापुले चाक हान्यो कि के हो ? किन त्येस्तो ज्यापुको दुश्मन भाको ? आजकलको जमानामा पनि मुजी खाते मधिसे, ठकुरी, नेवार, ज्यापू भन्दै बस | मा साले तेरो मेंतालितिले तेरो आमा बाउ कस्ता थिए भनेर राम्ररि देखाउछ |

हे बैरागी बबुवा , तोहर गाँडमें किसी मधेसी और ज्यापू ने पिछ्वाड़े लण्ड घुसैयेके दिए का?

@biraghi sun aba ma k bhanchu !Tero baje kt bechne Dalal ,Tero bajiyi kothi ma basne baii, tero bau randi ko ban tero ama bhalu tero diidi beshya tero baini bauchikni tero bhai [Disallowed String for - bad word]ni tero thakuri shah cast lai atro kha aba !!! tan kasari payko bhanera tero ama lai sodh aba tero kaka le chikera payako ho bujis sala !!! [Disallowed String for - use not allowed] aba dehki tero kaka lai bau bhan sala !!!!jyapu jaypu bhanyacha bhanyacha sala !!!!

guys! don't use such damn abusive words. Everyone can be childish once in a while, but there is no cure for stupidity. Period ! this is not a poem, just writing for fun, but carries a message and is contemporary. so if somebody likes; its fine & if somebody doesn't like; its fine too. You can say that u don't like but u have no right to use abusive tone or words to any1. Btw this is not ur classroom. This represents the whole nepali community. ur behaviour represents the whole society and its people. We have lots of stupid people in nepali society , that's why it is suffering & the country's alwz poor.

^ +1

Yo suman bhai lai bau ama le tehi sikayo hola ta ke garosh bichara. Biu anushar ko faal. Bachhai dekhi yehi sundai aayeko cha ta. Aafno asli rup ta dekhai halyo ni. Tru identity. Ur people will be proud of u.

Okay. So prajwal deleted my comment, fine with me.

Understood it portrays sentiments of masses, but seriously dudes? He is more focussed on gleaning eulogies than fucking getting his point across.

Didn't like the poem, sounds like a passionate seventh grader.

@underwear u r being generous abt seventh grader. i wont even consider it for fifth. LOL.

Alright no name calling here. I liked dude's subsequent reply which was actually like more of a backpedalling, but in all fucking seriousness does every poem (this one sounds more like a speech) sung with bleeding nationalism sound like a grammy winner for us?

@ Prajwal Tuladhar - and that's when a mother cries, when there's no peace and unity amongst her children. Look no further, just look at this thread.
This was supposed to be a thread of a poem, and the comments are just epic.
Kudos to you guys! and we wonder why Nepal is in such state and has such politicians.

@bairaghi, since you are an expert in poetry, I'd like to run my poem by you.

There is a sajha user and Bairaghi is his name
In an innocent thread, he starts a caste-based flame
Demeaning other castes seems to be his sole aim
Jyapuphobic, Madhesiphobic you are a big shame
For Nepal's crisis, people like you are to blame

@minnpl i think u didnt read or ur big dimag understand my posts right. In fact i m against the caste system and thinking associated with it. Huncha ni HERD mentality. Arko jaat ko bhaye sabai wrong, aafno jaat ko bhaye sabai right. Until and unless we abandon this mentality, desh sadhai pachadi parne cha.

yes bairaghi we get you. You dont like his poem, hell u even said his poem is not even 5th grade standard. May be few people liked his poem and you get agitated and started caste based flame. You want everybody to agree with you..do you suffer from OCD?