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Nirman
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Posted on 07-01-05 9:34
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Although this may turn up as you would have expected but I hope you all will tolerate it anyways...And If the series gets delayed by one reason or another,I hope I will be forgiven...But I hope I will be doing my best not to keep u all waiting... ***************** Story: Unwritten She clicked on the sign in button. There was only mail in her mailbox. Nobody had actually written to her in long time. It had been long time since she had talked intimately, or written intimately to anyone. Usually, it would be "just a hi" letter to friends, and she had become fed up of those kinds of mail; then she stopped writing to anyone. She was too busy and there were many other things to keep in track of than old friends. Sometimes, she would call one of friends, sometimes one of them would call, and that would just merely become hi, hello, what you are doing etc. etc. She clicked on the Inbox sign; there was mail from someone whom she knew intimately, exactly after three years or so (she had lost track of time). Quickly she clicked on to see the letter. The message began to unfold. ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Dear Smriti, Had been long time, since we had kept in touch, 1364 days to be exact. I am somewhere else now, you must be somewhere, and I had always wished you would be much happier, at least more than me. I am just keeping up with myself. After I left I didn?t find myself in need of anyone; maybe I had lost faith too, but I was keeping up with myself. It was then I met her, actually she came to meet me. She was charming, caring and knew what was inside me. I saw you in her, and I knew I was not doing right to her, but I loved her company. She loved me; and I was too much lonely now, I loved her back. I know I am not perfect for such a lovely girl, but this time I don?t want to loose love so precious. I am getting married next week. I know I am kind of selfish to write something like this to you after such a long time, but I needed to talk with someone who knew me entirely; and I couldn?t think anyone else than you. I hope you are lot happier, and at your best. Love, Aakash ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- The turmoil began to unfold in her minds, she had still not forgotten him and reminiscences began to run vividly in her minds. They had been friends for more than 7 years. They had known each other better than he/ she would know himself/herself, they were soul mate. It was him who thought of breaking the friendship and she hadn?t bothered to keep track of him. She was just like that, coolest as usual, and no loss was great loss for her, just life would go on. He had gone his own way and she her own. She had seen him first in that coffee shop. She had seen him first with her old friend from school. After that she had met him at college. "Hey we had met before, haven?t we??" he had come to her. "Aan coffee shop ma Arun sanga bheteko hoina??" She had remembered. "Yup, Tmi pani yehin padhne ho??" He had continued the conversation. "Ho!!" That day they had become friends formally. Although they were from different faculties, there was some chemistry between them; they clicked as good friends pretty soon. ***************************************
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Nirman
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Posted on 07-17-05 9:42
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Sorry for keeping all of you waiting...But it seems like my writing skills are gone in haze for few days...त्यो दिमाग गाई चर्न गयो भन्छ नि....;)....well have been bg with other stuffs too...Visa and stuff..Hope u understand...I will be most probaly posting much more this week...Thanx again for waiting!!! I m all flattered dudes!!! ~Nirman~
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Posted on 07-17-05 12:58
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लप स्टोरि आयो ल निर्माणजी बाट , ल जावोस् न यार कति बेर हो ! ;)
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meera
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Posted on 07-17-05 7:40
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Nirman I thought I was supposed to buy your soul, student discount payencha? And also nice story there. How's my CD burning process going on?
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Nirman
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Posted on 09-23-05 12:17
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These few weeks have been pretty hectic for me. After such a long tyam, I m writing sequels to above....more I will post maybe tonite...if I donot fall asleep writing!!!!....Thanx for having patience guys....Will be posting a sequel within 24 hrs....have nice day!!! or maybe night!!! Nirman~*
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palpali gaule
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Posted on 09-23-05 12:38
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nirman, i was in nepal when you started this thread and had no idea about it until right now! thank you for sharing this story with us- i look forward to reading the progression and evolution of the relationship between characters. very engaging!
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Nirman
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Posted on 10-05-05 4:10
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*************************************** The movie had gone into intermission long before he even realized it has started. His mind was perplexed...rather intrigued by the memoirs coming back as the flashlights. He had never been so confused and disoriented when watching a movie. He looked around...just to see Anita watching the movie so calmly and so gracefully...He was disheartened, is he was doing alright?A twinge of guilt hitting right into his heart?Helpless by the situation?he rather began to focus on the movie? Hero was carrying heroine, She had drank some water with poison?He was trying best to save her?found a home and tried best to make her awake?sings a song?whole orchestra came around when song started?. "Hindi filmma geet aaunasath love parihalne bhaneko?dhotihaaruko desha yestai hunchha ki kya ho? geet ma nai love, geet ma tragedy aani life finish ni geet ma?" He had once told Smriti. "Tmilai man pardaina geet haaru??" She had asked. "Mann ta parchha ni..But cassette ma sunda matra, not in movies?geet herne bhaye music videos chandai chha ni." "Well its about choices ni?"She always had this readymade dialogues?and yeah She was right?It was freedom of choices??.. "Hey, film mann parena??" Anita must have noticed something. "Hoina, these songs rather intrigues me?" He remarked? "Okies, but its nice song ni hoina??" She loved that song? "Yeah, but only when I listen in my CD player?not in movies..!!!" He replied. Anita felt something different, and it was never like this before?.But too afraid to ask. Maybe some other time? The movie was heading for the same old hindi endings?A typical masala film and yeah three hours of pure entertainments?Aakash's choice had changed with time, but he took break from them for a while? Coming back from the cinema, he passed by the college?young girls and guys playing the basketball?His thought went back to his heydays again? "Hey, tmi sports weekma bhaag naline??" Smriti had asked. "Ma ta fan matra? Cricket khelna mann thyo but haven't played it for while?so not anything?tmi ni?? "Well, Maybe I will play Basketball!!" She was participating? ***************************************
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MatrixRose
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Posted on 10-05-05 4:15
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Well, Maybe I will play Basketball!!" She was participating? ----------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------- Ani Ani? :D
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Nirman
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Posted on 10-05-05 11:54
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Nepalma nai kathanak chalchitra chaliraa belama K katha lekhnu yahan... Dikka lagyo aaru thapna ni...Man ma utsaha utpanna bho bhane jaror thapne chhu ra antya garnechhu yo kathako... Nirman~*...Dikka...*~
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Posted on 10-05-05 12:20
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k bho aja nirman lai???? kina dikka lagyo??? well ur stories add charm to the dull sajha threads... hope to see more of your piece... by the way were you watching "lucky" with ur fiance Anita?? the sequence you had mentioned reminded me of that movie!
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Nirman
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Posted on 10-05-05 12:38
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Hey Dreamz, This is just a fiction...withstanding that some parts may represent my life...But this is purely fiction... DISCLAIMER: यो केवल कल्पनामा आधारित कथा हो। यो कथामा उल्लेखित घटना कोहि कसैमा मेल खान गएमा त्यो संयोग मात्र हुनेछ। :) Nirman~*
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Posted on 10-05-05 12:57
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Wonderful writing Nirman... I am loving it... yeh dil maange more..........
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Posted on 10-06-05 8:16
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nirman bro, thapney hoina katha ? Lau hai chaado garam. Kyarnu tyaam nai chaina. rey kyaaaaa................. harkeDai
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pundit
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Posted on 10-06-05 8:25
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*parda pachadi bata* maile padhi rachu hai, *kurirachu* restroom gayera aaunchu, dherai kuraan diieeyo. ;)
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Posted on 10-06-05 9:46
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Aiight mate. Done witht this episode. Waiting for more. A thought ran across mah mind - perhaps I might as well use your disclaimer for future reference. ;-) Just so that my play acting, in general or in sajha, might brew some false predomination. Keep em' coming! - Indisguise:)
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Posted on 10-06-05 9:54
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good work again! i read the last part, about time you bring that up :D i have been waiting for that. now i don't know how long we gotta wait for the next one. make it quick :D tata
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Nirman
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Posted on 10-07-05 12:23
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*************************************** The bike almost hit the car in front of it. He was zapped back into reality. He was baffled with his intuitions today, and was almost out of control of all the emotions filling him up today. Smriti was 5 minutes late to her office. Never been late before though...and one day wouldn't matter. "Ma'm, we have meeting at 9 30 today." Her secretary reminded her. She had forgotten about this...almost...and she had left some notes for meeting back at home. "What the heck!!! Where is my mind wandering today..." She was baffled... She had limited time...yet she looked around to prepare some mighty quick...maybe she can!!! And a flashback glimpsed into her memories. It was her project presentation that day. And she had the sports week to attend...Hurrying with the works, she had finished the project just in time...and had gone to attend the game. Game was tough, opponents fierce...But She had managed well as a captain...Two years in a row as a captain...and 3-1 record was not that bad...She could hear Akash cheering her up from time to time... "Ah!! Friend indeed...always there!!!" She was happy as she could be to have him as a friend. He was always there whenever she needed a shoulder to lean on, But he was kind of different...disappearing once in while just into a thin air. The final quarter was on!!!... The point margin was low. They were just gaining by 2 points. But the opponents were holding them to score more, and attacking fiercely as well. They were defending at their best. The tall girl of their opponent was unmarked just outside three point line. Smriti cried out loud for her team mate to check her. "Check... Check!!!" She cried as hard as she could...But it was too late. The ball swished around. And there it went right into the basket...The whole court raised with surprise...half of them cheering for the opponents... She looked at her watch...The time was ticking by. Only 35 seconds remaining. She looked around, and saw Aakash, still cheering her up... "There is time still!!!"...She didn't want to loose. She passed the ball to her second best scorer (her best scorer had called day off that day). But she was checked well, ball came back to her...She looked around...and she thought to give it a try herself. She gave a shot...ball went right on the target...and swished around the rim of basket... and came OUT!!!....The game-ending whistle blew... She stood there blank...and broken hearted...She could have won...tears were jerking down her cheek. She felt a hand on her shoulders...He had come to console her...and without a word He took her outside the court...That was all she needed!!!...and He knew it without a word. ***************************************
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Nirman
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Posted on 10-07-05 12:24
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Thanks everyone for encouragements and comments...I value them all!!!...:) Nirman~*
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Posted on 10-07-05 12:27
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Feri ani ani? .... keep smiling... :)
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Nirman
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Posted on 10-07-05 12:51
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ani ani.. THE END ....aabo naya katha suru gardai chhu..:P hunna???...;) Nirman~*
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MatrixRose
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Posted on 10-07-05 12:56
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Oks....
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